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New Surf Movie Script!
I have been working on a script for a surf movie for a while now. Like most movies it really just consists of one final scene with 85 minutes of crap as a filler in front of it to make up the 90 min feature length. I have the possible titles shortlisted to:
PS, I SURF
THERE WILL BE SURF and
NO SURF FOR OLD MEN
Any feedback would be much appreciated, cheers guys!
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EXT: PACIFIC OCEAN DAY
Somewhere in the Pacific. Two boats converge on a near mythical wave called The Zipper. This wave requires a swell from both the north and the south to converge and forms a funneling fullpipe, legend has it the wave breaks once every 50 years. One boat is REECE's crew and the other KYLE's crew. The two are brothers that have been fierce rivals since REECE snaked KYLE to win the Central Coast Junior Blue Tongue Brewery title and went on to be world champ. KYLE was always the better surfer but went into a spiraling depression and joined the Army, serving in Iraq.
KYLE and REECE talk to each others boats via megaphones.
REECE
You're too late man. We've got this wave.
KYLE
Just like back on the Central Coast huh Reece.
EXT: REECE BOAT. DAY
REECE flashes back to the Central Coast when he snaked his brother. A deckhand steadies him as he slips.
DECKHAND
Hey houlies, you okay man?
EXTREME C/U on REECE's shaking hand, he hides it away.
REECE
Wha? Yeah fine, let's hit the water.
REECE begins suiting up in multi layers of fluoro sponsored lycra.
EXT: DECK OF KYLES BOAT DAY
KYLE strips down to his plain black boardshorts that have the makers brand mark pixilated over. KYLE is about to enter the water when his driver played by Aussie Joe Bugner shakes KYLE'S hand fiercely.
AUSSIE JOE
You got this man
The two embrace fiercely and tears stream down KYLE and AUSSIE JOE's face. KYLE paddles out.
EXT. THE LINEUP. DAY
KYLE and REECE sit on the takeoff spot.
REECE
You shouldn't be here man, you
don't have what it takes.
KYLE
You think the tour can prepare you
for this? Your wrong man...dead wrong.
REECE
Let's see about that.
On the horizon a massive wave rises from both horizons and moves towards the takeoff spot.
KYLE
I'm in the spot for this
man, you know it.
The two waves begin to form a cylindrical 30 foot fullpipe which grinds towards the lineup. KYLE paddles but at the last minute, REECE strokes deeper into the takeoff zone and snakes him. He's too deep.
KYLE
Reece! No, your too deep.
A smile crosses REECE's face as he ignores KYLE and takes off. REECE drops down the face and pulls into the immense barrel. Something is wrong. REECE looks down and his board begins to vibrate.
REECE
What the...?
REECE wipes out and the entire Pacific pours in over the top of him
CUT TO; KYLE sitting on his board
KYLE
Reece ! Noooooo
Finally the clouds of mist clear and at the end of the lineup KYLE sees REECE lying motionless on his board. With tears streaming down his face, KYLE paddles for another wave and catches it. KYLE works the wave perfectly, riding the right and then crossing over the flats to pick up a line on the left. Suddenly KYLE reaches the same spot REECE did and his board begins to vibrate. KYLE struggles to control his board.
KYLE(to himself)
What's wrong, why is it fighting me.
KYLE puts his hand to his temple as he suddenly feels very dizzy, a cold sweat breaks out across his forehead and he experiences a flashback to Iraq.
EXT: PERSIAN GULF. DAY
KYLE and a US Serviceman called BUTCH sit on their boards in the shipping lane at Basra, Iraq. They both wear camoflagued pants. The US Servicemen cracks two tins of Michelob Low Carb Light Beer open and forces one into KYLE's hand.
BUTCH
Hell of a way to spend your R and R
huh soldier!
KYLE takes a swig from his can of Michelob Low Carb Light Beer. The fruity almost whispy flavours so different from the heady, hoppy flavours of beer from his homeland, so far away.
An enormous merchant ship steams out of the harbour towards the pair.
BUTCH
Batter up dude!
The 3 foot wake of the ship reaches them and both catch the wave on their 9'6" Bongo Perkins signature models.
BUTCH
That's it dude, you got it!
BUTCH light a cigar as he and KYLE ride the wave.
Suddenly there is a faint whistling noise. BUTCH seems to not hear it at all. All to late, KYLE realises that the sound is from a stray AIM-120C missile dropped from a US F-22 RAPTOR
KYLE(screaming)
Butch! Hit the deck
Too late
The whole ocean lifts up and KYLE looks on to see BUTCH incinerated in a flurry of fire and shrapnel. KYLE surfs through the patch where BUTCH was and is covered in blood, gore and Chinese fibreglass as the remants of BUTCH and his board fall back to Earth.
KYLE
NOOOOOOOOOOOO!
EXT THE WAVE DAY
KYLE is almost of the back of his board, immediately he regains his composure, strikes his signature pooman stance and blasts through the impossible section. The wave closes in all around him hundreds of metres ahead KYLE sees a small white light and aims for it. There is a voice in his head.
STAY ON TARGET
STAY ON TARGET
KYLE blasts free of the barrel just as the entire wave collapses in upon itself. KYLE paddles towards the limp figure of REECE lying on his board.
REECE (weakly)
Hey, you made it bro. You made it,
always were the best one.
KYLE
No bro, you were the one that
had what it took to make it to
the top.
REECE
I wish you were there with me bro.
KYLE
I was bro...I was.
A MONTAGE sequence begins showing REECE winning surfing competitions all over the world and there is every shot somewhere is KYLE hiding in the crowd cheering his brother on.
KYLE and REECE shake hands one last time as REECE dies.
KYLE
Nooooooooooo.
EXT PACIFIC ISLAND SUNSET
KYLE carries REECE's body from the boat and wades ashore with it. AUSSIE JOE moves to help him.
KYLE
No mate it's okay, I got this.
He ain't heavy...he's my brother.
KYLE places REECE's body on a bonfire with his signature Thai shaped 9'0" Foil. Natives dance around the scene as KYLE lights the bonfire and looks on.
As the black smoke from the fibreglass rises, KYLE sees the spirit of REECE next to the spirit of BUTCH. Tears of joy streak across KYLE's soot blackened face and he shakes his head laughing. The two spirits laugh back at him. BUTCH slaps the spirit of REECE on the back.
KYLE stops and comes to attention, he salutes and BUTCH does the same.
KYLE
Permission to surf sir?
BUTCH
Permission granted soldier!
FREEZE FRAME - KYLE leaps up into the air punching the sky.
ROLL CREDITS
CUE JACK JOHNSON surf music theme
FADE OUT:
PS, I SURF
THERE WILL BE SURF and
NO SURF FOR OLD MEN
Any feedback would be much appreciated, cheers guys!
_________________________________________________________
EXT: PACIFIC OCEAN DAY
Somewhere in the Pacific. Two boats converge on a near mythical wave called The Zipper. This wave requires a swell from both the north and the south to converge and forms a funneling fullpipe, legend has it the wave breaks once every 50 years. One boat is REECE's crew and the other KYLE's crew. The two are brothers that have been fierce rivals since REECE snaked KYLE to win the Central Coast Junior Blue Tongue Brewery title and went on to be world champ. KYLE was always the better surfer but went into a spiraling depression and joined the Army, serving in Iraq.
KYLE and REECE talk to each others boats via megaphones.
REECE
You're too late man. We've got this wave.
KYLE
Just like back on the Central Coast huh Reece.
EXT: REECE BOAT. DAY
REECE flashes back to the Central Coast when he snaked his brother. A deckhand steadies him as he slips.
DECKHAND
Hey houlies, you okay man?
EXTREME C/U on REECE's shaking hand, he hides it away.
REECE
Wha? Yeah fine, let's hit the water.
REECE begins suiting up in multi layers of fluoro sponsored lycra.
EXT: DECK OF KYLES BOAT DAY
KYLE strips down to his plain black boardshorts that have the makers brand mark pixilated over. KYLE is about to enter the water when his driver played by Aussie Joe Bugner shakes KYLE'S hand fiercely.
AUSSIE JOE
You got this man
The two embrace fiercely and tears stream down KYLE and AUSSIE JOE's face. KYLE paddles out.
EXT. THE LINEUP. DAY
KYLE and REECE sit on the takeoff spot.
REECE
You shouldn't be here man, you
don't have what it takes.
KYLE
You think the tour can prepare you
for this? Your wrong man...dead wrong.
REECE
Let's see about that.
On the horizon a massive wave rises from both horizons and moves towards the takeoff spot.
KYLE
I'm in the spot for this
man, you know it.
The two waves begin to form a cylindrical 30 foot fullpipe which grinds towards the lineup. KYLE paddles but at the last minute, REECE strokes deeper into the takeoff zone and snakes him. He's too deep.
KYLE
Reece! No, your too deep.
A smile crosses REECE's face as he ignores KYLE and takes off. REECE drops down the face and pulls into the immense barrel. Something is wrong. REECE looks down and his board begins to vibrate.
REECE
What the...?
REECE wipes out and the entire Pacific pours in over the top of him
CUT TO; KYLE sitting on his board
KYLE
Reece ! Noooooo
Finally the clouds of mist clear and at the end of the lineup KYLE sees REECE lying motionless on his board. With tears streaming down his face, KYLE paddles for another wave and catches it. KYLE works the wave perfectly, riding the right and then crossing over the flats to pick up a line on the left. Suddenly KYLE reaches the same spot REECE did and his board begins to vibrate. KYLE struggles to control his board.
KYLE(to himself)
What's wrong, why is it fighting me.
KYLE puts his hand to his temple as he suddenly feels very dizzy, a cold sweat breaks out across his forehead and he experiences a flashback to Iraq.
EXT: PERSIAN GULF. DAY
KYLE and a US Serviceman called BUTCH sit on their boards in the shipping lane at Basra, Iraq. They both wear camoflagued pants. The US Servicemen cracks two tins of Michelob Low Carb Light Beer open and forces one into KYLE's hand.
BUTCH
Hell of a way to spend your R and R
huh soldier!
KYLE takes a swig from his can of Michelob Low Carb Light Beer. The fruity almost whispy flavours so different from the heady, hoppy flavours of beer from his homeland, so far away.
An enormous merchant ship steams out of the harbour towards the pair.
BUTCH
Batter up dude!
The 3 foot wake of the ship reaches them and both catch the wave on their 9'6" Bongo Perkins signature models.
BUTCH
That's it dude, you got it!
BUTCH light a cigar as he and KYLE ride the wave.
Suddenly there is a faint whistling noise. BUTCH seems to not hear it at all. All to late, KYLE realises that the sound is from a stray AIM-120C missile dropped from a US F-22 RAPTOR
KYLE(screaming)
Butch! Hit the deck
Too late
The whole ocean lifts up and KYLE looks on to see BUTCH incinerated in a flurry of fire and shrapnel. KYLE surfs through the patch where BUTCH was and is covered in blood, gore and Chinese fibreglass as the remants of BUTCH and his board fall back to Earth.
KYLE
NOOOOOOOOOOOO!
EXT THE WAVE DAY
KYLE is almost of the back of his board, immediately he regains his composure, strikes his signature pooman stance and blasts through the impossible section. The wave closes in all around him hundreds of metres ahead KYLE sees a small white light and aims for it. There is a voice in his head.
STAY ON TARGET
STAY ON TARGET
KYLE blasts free of the barrel just as the entire wave collapses in upon itself. KYLE paddles towards the limp figure of REECE lying on his board.
REECE (weakly)
Hey, you made it bro. You made it,
always were the best one.
KYLE
No bro, you were the one that
had what it took to make it to
the top.
REECE
I wish you were there with me bro.
KYLE
I was bro...I was.
A MONTAGE sequence begins showing REECE winning surfing competitions all over the world and there is every shot somewhere is KYLE hiding in the crowd cheering his brother on.
KYLE and REECE shake hands one last time as REECE dies.
KYLE
Nooooooooooo.
EXT PACIFIC ISLAND SUNSET
KYLE carries REECE's body from the boat and wades ashore with it. AUSSIE JOE moves to help him.
KYLE
No mate it's okay, I got this.
He ain't heavy...he's my brother.
KYLE places REECE's body on a bonfire with his signature Thai shaped 9'0" Foil. Natives dance around the scene as KYLE lights the bonfire and looks on.
As the black smoke from the fibreglass rises, KYLE sees the spirit of REECE next to the spirit of BUTCH. Tears of joy streak across KYLE's soot blackened face and he shakes his head laughing. The two spirits laugh back at him. BUTCH slaps the spirit of REECE on the back.
KYLE stops and comes to attention, he salutes and BUTCH does the same.
KYLE
Permission to surf sir?
BUTCH
Permission granted soldier!
FREEZE FRAME - KYLE leaps up into the air punching the sky.
ROLL CREDITS
CUE JACK JOHNSON surf music theme
FADE OUT:
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Hmm, good points Nick. Bah, I'm scrapping the project, back to the drawing board!Nick Carroll wrote:Where's the role for the crusty old Central Coast local bloke who'd watched 'em grow up. "Told ya so," etc.
Plus there is NOTHING in here about illegal drugs, how are we supposed to believe in a storyline about pro surfing where there are no illegal drugs.
this is quite possibly the greatest storyline i've ever read.
i'd like to see vin diesel as kyle. he can do one of those pretend aussie accents that americans think is legit
and have you thought about some sort of talking dolphin that offers spiritual words of wisdom? he can mostly talk profound sounding jibberish thatt doesn't actually stand up to closer inspection, but sounds very deep and soulful
i'd like to see vin diesel as kyle. he can do one of those pretend aussie accents that americans think is legit
and have you thought about some sort of talking dolphin that offers spiritual words of wisdom? he can mostly talk profound sounding jibberish thatt doesn't actually stand up to closer inspection, but sounds very deep and soulful
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spook wrote:this is quite possibly the greatest storyline i've ever read.
i'd like to see vin diesel as kyle. he can do one of those pretend aussie accents that americans think is legit
and have you thought about some sort of talking dolphin that offers spiritual words of wisdom? he can mostly talk profound sounding jibberish thatt doesn't actually stand up to closer inspection, but sounds very deep and soulful
cast chambers as the dolphin cast chambers as the dolphin cast chambers as the dolphin.
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spook wrote:and have you thought about some sort of talking dolphin that offers spiritual words of wisdom? she can mostly talk profound sounding jibberish thatt doesn't actually stand up to closer inspection, but sounds very deep and soulful
cast chambers as the dolphin cast chambers as the dolphin cast chambers as the dolphin.
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